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Date: 2004-11-16 03:28:13

Comment:

OK, something i can go to town with here, lets look at your 'verse'.

'I aint fat its all in your mind buy our album and ill make u press rewind'  Ignoring all the punctuation problems, lets look at the facts, you ARE fat, we've seen the pictures, not only that but you are fucking hideous, and secondly you dont have an album, you cant even rap, and noone fucking likes you.

'you faggots must be blind you losers think im kind' How can you call us blind when you dont think you're fat? Mate, i dont think you are on to be questioning anyones eyesight. You say you're not kind, but i bet you're all to ready to help your mum clean you're room, and probably come straight home from school pretty promptly... loser

'like any famous rapper ill reenergise any time' Couldnt think of a rapper that could reenergise any time eh? Lets be serious, would any half decent rapper call other people 'famous rappers'? Get some fucking knowledge on the subject you loser.

'u nerds commited a crime u drank too much lemon and lime' What the hell not only made you write this - but also post it on a website. Has it always been illegal to drink too much lemon and lime, i wasnt aware of this at all!

'u stole all da food and rushed out da express shopping like' another simple line, listen you fat bastard, if anyone has stolen food it is probably you, and it was probably cos your mum wouldnt let you have any more chocolate, and you spent all your pocket money already.

'memorise my verse ill make your brain reverse' Again, you are putting lines in this piece of shit that just dont mean anything, you are seriously gonna make my brain reverse with these lines? You are honestly proud of these lines? Is your mum proud of them as well? Does she help you or something? This is a fucking joke you fucking loser!

'Jerome ur da one who went obese in america first u fat ass fag' Ok, i realise that i have split your obviously amazinlgy structured 'verse' in half here, but it had to be looked at together. I mean, you have just told everyone that you are not only the first obese person to exist in America, but you've also just come out the closet, and in one sentence! Havent you done well! You deserve a gold star for bravery on that one there, fucking loser.

'drink some coke to quench your thirst' This is yet ANOTHER pointless line which you are throwing in, lemme guess, at the time you were probably drinking a coke right? And felt inspired by the shiny red can.. who the hell are you talknig to anyways, you command yourself to drink some coke, eh Jerome? Is that some sort of Autism? Cant do a fucking command without first instructing yourself? If so please repeat after me ' Cut off my own hands '

'u faggot nerds must be brain dead or geek nerd cused' Ok, you have immediately done a basic rapping flaw here, unless using a form of alliteration, or unless you are seriously stressing a point - in which it needs to be repeated more often - you have used the same word, pretty much, twice in one sentence, i.e. nerd, especially for a noun. Come up with something slightly more descriptive, mext time, alright mate?

Fucking show this to all your make-believe buddies at MTV and in the fucking magazines, you untalented shit.